It's been a busy week for us. After creating our own odes, we are now creating poems using extended metaphors similar those used by Julio Noboa Polanco in his poem "Identity." Please enjoy!
I'll be Lake and them be the Ocean by:_razor Let them be the ocean Full of life, full of mystery But a place for waste I would be a mossy,smelly lake a secret place for sad people when they are in need of space A clear, calming lake with poisonous algae to have to be part of a small body of lakes to guard my own self from possible dangers And be exposed to green life surrounding me Be a rare, shallow lake showing my own beauty to the world I'd rather be sometimes avoided than be a dumping place killing lives beneath it than be a deep, moonlight blue that is admired by shameless people I'd rather be a poisonous algae, and smelly lake Than be a life source that's taken granted by creatures above and instead be a small lake alone in the dark and not be big and exposed from pollution
1. Literary device: Extended Metaphor. "I'll be Lake and them be the Ocean" 2. I Like how the author paints a picture of a small, algae covered lake and uses it symbolizes being along and calm in life. 3. I can relate to this because I too like being self-centered, alone, and unnoticed.
Let them be cats cute, furry, and adored by many. Wanted as pets, hugged like stuffed animals and lounge anywhere they want. I, however, will be a rat. The cats chase me but I am quick to protect myself. I'd rather live in some holes and hunt for my own food instead of staying under a roof of another person. I'd rather be a smelly, fat rat running around streets and dusty old rooms eating left-overs. To be able to make my own decisions and take care of my other companions instead of being loved by many. I'd rather be independent instead of being owned. If I could live alone, free and left alone, I'd rather be a disgusting fat rat living anywhere I want.
Good simile to explain what you want to say, and good metaphor to show your character. Most part I like is last three line. I relate to the message. I also want to live my life by my self without my parents.
Nice simile and metaphor and I also like how it tells us to be ourselves when we grow up. The part that I like the most is on line 6. I can relate to this because when I grow up, I want to be able to provide my own house, foods, etc... then to live in another person’s roof.
Let them be the mansion, a well-built and a luxury home, but filled with dirt I’ll be an old Nipa hut, peaceful, cheap, and a fragile place Let them be a home of many, but a home of boredom I’d rather be a home of one, but a place to forget all the dilemma Let them be built by everyone, soaring high, strong, and unbreakable but can’t stand by their own I’d rather be built with the owner itself, not expecting others to help me stand strong I'd rather be an old Nipa hut
The thing that I like about this poem is that how you said " soaring high, and strong " keep it up with the work, never gave up. Good job with yur work.
Let them be as animals always admired, playful, that always endangered by humans. I’d rather be the forest, that is not appreciating, that provides food for animals and humans. I’d rather be under appreciated that gives humans and animals fresh air. The animals locked up in the zoo and be the greenery forest. To be able to grow tall and make my own habitat and food. Then an animal predator to my own kind. And instead be what humans and animals depend on. I would rather be unappreciated forest and not be an animal that dies in a short period of time. An animals that is dying because of humans destroying their environment. A tree that is destroyed be human that I’m trying to re grow An animal that doesn’t appreciate the forest.
I like how you describe the reason you want to be a tree.Also talking about imagery and simile.The thing I like about your story is that you like to be tree to help animals and also give them food.I can relate to him because i love animals and also i would like to help them and give them food.
Let them be planets always studied for expectations,stepped on,depends on space but the earth on a planet being abused by greedy people. I’d rather be a space that is quiet,no humans that no one else can destroy it. The planets is just a circle with nothing. The space can’t bright without darkness. Some planets are destroyed by humans. The space has so much secret that humans can’t find out. I’d rather be the space that is free. Planets has life,animals,humans etc. There are eight planets are in the solar system but some of them are destroyed. I’d rather be the space that is like a mesmerizing. I’d rather be the space that is holding lives.
Good metaphor to explain and show what you feel. Your identity is unique and you preferred to be in a space where you can be happy. This poem is really good because KC2005 uses the issue in planets to describe her. In this poem its like KC2005 is a kind and loving person. This message have a big meaning and i relate to this because i also like in space where no one can destroy you or others but only where you can be happy.
Let them be Gold Shining ,Shimmering Gold Valued as Expensive Things Admired and Appreciated like Human But Chase by Everyone. I’ll be Bronze Unattractive, Ugly Gold Unnoticed as the air And Hard to recognize like the homeless. I ’d rather be Bronze Hot like lava And ignored by people. Than An Appreciated Gold But cause of argument. I’d rather be Bronze Unattractive,and Unappealing Bronze.
Let them be as ant, always strong,smart and looking for food but they can make their own nest It'd rather be tiger hunting other animals like a furry and dangerous to defend himself by wild animals to senses prey protecting his babies from wild animals I'd rather be tiger than be ant If i could smell dead animals in the forest deadly tiger by:RjKinG234
Let them be as the beach always crowded, hot, and with lots of fish swimming by but boring with only shiny shells to hunt for. I'd rather be the forest Where wild boars are hunted Like a tiger looking for food for it cubs To hear the sound of the birds and To feel their tracking feet in the mud trough the green lush breathing the fresh air I'd rather be the forest than be the beach if I could live everyday with excitement I'd rather be the forest
DCA918 uses metaphor to represent him being unique compared to other people. DCA918 represents himself as a forest, describing himself as a person full of excitement and nature-loving attitude, being able to breath fresh air and being able to hear the beautiful chirping of the birds. DCA918 compared himself to people being the beach, having lots of friends, but boring at the same time. I really like this poem for I can relate to it. I prefer being by myself and to have fun by my own. However, I am also friendly but I don't talk too often towards people im not close with. I rather be the forest.
Let them be sunlight. Playful and happy, but sweaty and smelly. I'd rather be moonlight, calming everybody like a puppy getting sleepy. To grow bigger and to be strong and playing with other puppies I'd rather be the moonlight Than be the sunlight If I could make everybody happy I’d be the moonlight.
I liked the metaphor "Let them be sunlight playful and happy, but sweaty and smelly" because it relates to how we play in rugby. We have fun but then have to work hard st the same time. We laugh but were also serious.
Let them be as Rivers always flowing with little fish and houses along side of it but only a mile or two long. I'd rather be the ocean rippling waters like a woman's hair to take you everywhere and to make your dreams come true cresting mountains of water. I'd rather be the blue, big ocean than be the green, short river if i could be free to go wherever my heart takes me I'd rather be the ocean.
I think that the literary device you use is a metaphor I like how you use the ocean to show your feelings and the feelings you can show just comparing the ocean I felt like was water being free when I read it
Let them be as sunny days always bright shiny and playful but hot, sweaty, and thirsty. I'd rather be a rainy day showering the flowers like a mommy bathing her baby to grow bigger and to be fresh becoming healthy and beautiful. I'd rather be a gray rainy day than be a bright sunny day. If I could make everything happy I'd rather be a rainy day.
Let them be as tigers always big, fast, and strong but dangerous. I'd rather be an ant working together like a big family To help the queen ant protecting her family I'd rather be an ant than be a tiger If I could work with my family everyday I'd rather be an ant.
Let them be as comfortable like shoes always useful for working out and for walking on the rough cement and cherished by people.
I'd rather be a sock running in the hot weather like a person sweating and being tired. Soft and smelly exercising with people Who achieve their goals.
I'd rather be socks than be shoes
If I could help people achieve their goals I'd rather be a soft and smelly sock.
I like the metaphor comparing yourself to "soft and smelly sock" because you want to "help peope achieve their goals." I think the message is to perserve and reach your goals. I could relate to this message because I never give up on something I really admire. I keep going, finishing what I started.
My sister is like my twin because we talk the same way,when we laugh we sound same and we alway wear something same. She is also like my friend because she alway play with me and we alway making fun of each other. she is like my mom because she alway woke me up when is time to school. I will alway love her and she'll be alway be my bestfriend.
I'll be Lake and them be the Ocean
ReplyDeleteby:_razor
Let them be the ocean
Full of life, full of mystery
But a place for waste
I would be a mossy,smelly lake
a secret place for sad people when they are in need of space
A clear, calming lake with poisonous algae
to have to be part of a small body of lakes
to guard my own self from possible dangers
And be exposed to green life surrounding me
Be a rare, shallow lake
showing my own beauty to the world
I'd rather be sometimes avoided
than be a dumping place killing lives beneath it
than be a deep, moonlight blue that is admired by shameless people
I'd rather be a poisonous algae, and smelly lake
Than be a life source that's taken granted by creatures above
and instead be a small lake alone in the dark
and not be big and exposed from pollution
1. Literary device: Extended Metaphor. "I'll be Lake and them be the Ocean"
Delete2. I Like how the author paints a picture of a small, algae covered lake and uses it symbolizes being along and calm in life.
3. I can relate to this because I too like being self-centered, alone, and unnoticed.
My Identity
ReplyDeleteBy: MJ05
Let them be cats
cute, furry, and adored by many.
Wanted as pets, hugged like stuffed animals and lounge anywhere they want.
I, however, will be a rat.
The cats chase me but I am quick to protect myself.
I'd rather live in some holes and hunt for my own food instead of staying under a roof of another person.
I'd rather be a smelly, fat rat running around streets and dusty old rooms eating left-overs.
To be able to make my own decisions and take care of my other companions instead of being loved by many.
I'd rather be independent instead of being owned.
If I could live alone, free and left alone,
I'd rather be a disgusting fat rat living anywhere I want.
Good simile to explain what you want to say, and good metaphor to show your character. Most part I like is last three line. I relate to the message. I also want to live my life by my self without my parents.
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DeleteNice simile and metaphor and I also like how it tells us to be ourselves when we grow up. The part that I like the most is on line 6. I can relate to this because when I grow up, I want to be able to provide my own house, foods, etc... then to live in another person’s roof.
DeleteLet them be the mansion,
ReplyDeletea well-built and a luxury home,
but filled with dirt
I’ll be an old Nipa hut,
peaceful, cheap, and a fragile place
Let them be a home of many,
but a home of boredom
I’d rather be a home of one,
but a place to forget all the dilemma
Let them be built by everyone,
soaring high, strong, and unbreakable
but can’t stand by their own
I’d rather be built with the owner itself,
not expecting others to help me stand strong
I'd rather be an old Nipa hut
The thing that I like about this poem is that how you said " soaring high, and strong " keep it up with the work, never gave up. Good job with yur work.
DeleteMy identity
ReplyDeleteBy: Ram
Let them be as animals always admired, playful, that always endangered by humans.
I’d rather be the forest, that is not appreciating, that provides food for animals and humans.
I’d rather be under appreciated that gives humans and animals fresh air.
The animals locked up in the zoo and be the greenery forest.
To be able to grow tall and make my own habitat and food.
Then an animal predator to my own kind.
And instead be what humans and animals depend on.
I would rather be unappreciated forest and not be an animal that dies in a short period of time.
An animals that is dying because of humans destroying their environment.
A tree that is destroyed be human that I’m trying to re grow
An animal that doesn’t appreciate the forest.
I like how you describe the reason you want to be a tree.Also talking about imagery and simile.The thing I like about your story is that you like to be tree to help animals and also give them food.I can relate to him because i love animals and also i would like to help them and give them food.
DeleteMy identity
ReplyDeleteBY:KC2005
Let them be planets
always studied for expectations,stepped on,depends on space but the earth on a planet being abused by greedy people.
I’d rather be a space that is quiet,no humans that no one else can destroy it.
The planets is just a circle with nothing.
The space can’t bright without darkness.
Some planets are destroyed by humans.
The space has so much secret that humans can’t find out.
I’d rather be the space that is free.
Planets has life,animals,humans etc.
There are eight planets are in the solar system but some of them are destroyed.
I’d rather be the space that is like a mesmerizing.
I’d rather be the space that is holding lives.
Good metaphor to explain and show what you feel. Your identity is unique and you preferred to be in a space where you can be happy. This poem is really good because KC2005 uses the issue in planets to describe her. In this poem its like KC2005 is a kind and loving person. This message have a big meaning and i relate to this because i also like in space where no one can destroy you or others but only where you can be happy.
DeleteLet them be Gold
ReplyDeleteShining ,Shimmering Gold
Valued as Expensive Things
Admired and Appreciated like Human
But Chase by Everyone.
I’ll be Bronze
Unattractive, Ugly Gold
Unnoticed as the air
And Hard to recognize like the homeless.
I ’d rather be Bronze
Hot like lava
And ignored by people.
Than An Appreciated Gold
But cause of argument.
I’d rather be Bronze
Unattractive,and Unappealing Bronze.
Let them be as ant,
ReplyDeletealways strong,smart
and looking for food
but they can make their own nest
It'd rather be tiger
hunting other animals
like a furry and dangerous
to defend himself by wild animals
to senses prey
protecting his babies from wild animals
I'd rather be tiger
than be ant
If i could smell dead animals in the forest
deadly tiger by:RjKinG234
Identity
ReplyDeleteby DCA918
Let them be as the beach
always crowded, hot, and with lots of fish swimming by
but boring with only shiny shells to hunt for.
I'd rather be the forest
Where wild boars are hunted
Like a tiger looking for food for it cubs
To hear the sound of the birds and
To feel their tracking feet in the mud trough the green lush breathing the fresh air
I'd rather be the forest
than be the beach
if I could live everyday with excitement
I'd rather be the forest
DCA918 uses metaphor to represent him being unique compared to other people. DCA918 represents himself as a forest, describing himself as a person full of excitement and nature-loving attitude, being able to breath fresh air and being able to hear the beautiful chirping of the birds. DCA918 compared himself to people being the beach, having lots of friends, but boring at the same time. I really like this poem for I can relate to it. I prefer being by myself and to have fun by my own. However, I am also friendly but I don't talk too often towards people im not close with. I rather be the forest.
DeleteIdentity
ReplyDeleteby Samoanpride
Let them be sunlight.
Playful and happy,
but sweaty and smelly.
I'd rather be moonlight,
calming everybody
like a puppy getting sleepy.
To grow bigger and to be strong
and playing with other puppies
I'd rather be the moonlight
Than be the sunlight
If I could make everybody happy
I’d be the moonlight.
By: Yourolderbrother
DeleteI liked the metaphor "Let them be sunlight playful and happy, but sweaty and smelly" because it relates to how we play in rugby. We have fun but then have to work hard st the same time. We laugh but were also serious.
Identity
ReplyDeleteby Althi
Let them be as Rivers
always flowing
with little fish
and houses along side of it
but only a mile or two long.
I'd rather be the ocean
rippling waters like a woman's hair
to take you everywhere
and to make your dreams come true
cresting mountains of water.
I'd rather be the blue, big ocean
than be the green, short river
if i could be free to go wherever
my heart takes me
I'd rather be the ocean.
I think that the literary device you use is a metaphor I like how you use the ocean to show your feelings and the feelings you can show just comparing the ocean I felt like was water being free when I read it
DeleteIdentity
ReplyDeleteby Marissa
Let them be as sunny days
always bright
shiny
and playful
but hot, sweaty, and thirsty.
I'd rather be a rainy day
showering the flowers
like a mommy bathing her baby
to grow bigger and
to be fresh
becoming healthy and beautiful.
I'd rather be a gray rainy day
than be a bright sunny day.
If I could make everything happy
I'd rather be a rainy day.
Identify literary device good point and 2. i like how you having a good day 3. i relate to this poem by always like when is sonny and rainy
DeleteIdentity
ReplyDeleteby TT
Let them be as tigers
always big,
fast,
and strong
but dangerous.
I'd rather be an ant
working together
like a big family
To help the queen ant
protecting her family
I'd rather be an ant
than be a tiger
If I could work
with my family everyday
I'd rather be an ant.
Identity
ReplyDeleteBy:Tong@nS@mo@n
Let them be as comfortable like shoes
always useful
for working out
and for walking on the rough cement
and cherished by people.
I'd rather be a sock
running in the hot weather
like a person sweating and being tired.
Soft and smelly
exercising with people
Who achieve their goals.
I'd rather be socks
than be shoes
If I could help people
achieve their goals
I'd rather be a
soft and smelly sock.
By:Tong@nS@mo@n
I like the metaphor comparing yourself to "soft and smelly sock" because you want to "help peope achieve their goals." I think the message is to perserve and reach your goals. I could relate to this message because I never give up on something I really admire. I keep going, finishing what I started.
ReplyDeleteMy sister is like my twin because we talk the same way,when we laugh we sound same and we alway wear something same.
ReplyDeleteShe is also like my friend because she alway play with me and we alway making fun of each other.
she is like my mom because she alway woke me up when is time to school.
I will alway love her and she'll be alway be my bestfriend.